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November 12, 2007

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Jim L

Very good advice - to find out how fiction is being written today by reading submissions. Reading your post reminded me of a story in the New Yorker I tried to read last night ("The Cold Outside" by John Burnside in the Oct. 29 issue). The first sentence and paragraph are so clumsy that it almost made me dizzy trying to figure out who, what and where . I had to call it quits on the second page after that start.

I don't bring this up to rag on the story. Obviously I'm not the author's ideal reader. Rather I'd say that even published stories of the 1 out of 1000 class can meet the "do anything to not to read past the first sentence" test. Clarity and focus from diligent revising is very much in the author's best interest (and the harried editor's interest as well!)

Jim Murdoch

Since most of us will never end up with a job like that an alternative would be to join a site like Zoetrope where writers submit stories and poems to be critiqued. It's easy to say that you didn't like a story but not so easy always to say why it is a bad/poor/weak story.

They always say that if you want to improve your writing you should read a lot and that's fine but how many of us are likely to sit down with the metaphorical pen and paper after we've read the latest Ian McEwan?

Andrew Scott

It certainly isn't easy to articulate why and how a story isn't working. But Joshua's right that reading for a magazine/journal is always a smart move for writers. The journal I helped edit responded personally to every submission. We rejected 99% of the submissions we received and had to say why in a few sentences, all while gingerly carrying the writer's ego.

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